Fawnfur's bio

[Fawn]

[glow=red,2,300]~Fawnfur~[/glow]

Name: Fawnkit/paw/fur.
Explanation: Fawn~Because her furs pattern gives her a somewhat fawn-like appearance.Fur~because her fur is what makes her look like a fawn.
Gender: She cat
Age:Fourteen moons
Clan: WaveClan
Rank: Warrior

APPEARANCE

Build: She is very lanky,as a result of not liking to eat alot.
Fur: Brown.
Eyes: green.
Markings:She has a scar on her chin from slipping and falling on a sharp rock. chipped ear and a twisted paw from a previous battle.Has black and white spots on her head,tail,and back.
Overall: A small,sleek she-cat.She has light brown fur with black and white spots on her tail,head,and back.Her eyes are a vivid green.She is slim,but muscley.She is a good fighter and will fight for what she belives in.Her tail is very short,like a fawn's.her pelt is short and silky.all in all,she is a very beautiful cat.

PERSONALITY

Positive Traits: She is kind and caring.She loves life and will fight for the ones she loves.
Negative Traits: She is very short-tempered and a little hot-headed.Because of her past,she dosn't open up to most people.but,once she has decided to,she will.
Likes: swimming, running, and climbing.
Dislikes: climbing , being clumsy, and when people are annoying.Fears: She has three secret fears.one~birds.two~hieghts.three~not being accepted.she will be who she is but will fear if people accept her.
Ideals: Fawnfur value Hard work,honesty,and loyalty.

HISTORY

Family:father/Feather/uknown;mother/Iris/unkown;brother/Cloud/unknown;brother/sun/unknown;Greytail/mate/deceased[/glow]
History:
Her Father is Feather and her mother is Iris.They were both Loners.One day they encountered each other ,and they fell in love.They had three kits.Their names were Fawn,the oldest;Cloud,the smallest;and Sun .One day her and her brothers went to the river to play in the water.After about 15 minutes Fawn annoucned she hated water and wanted to go home.Her brothers joked with her then threw her in the water.she got dragged under and snagged her fur on a tree limb.The water pulled her free and carried her to a pond.She lived there for three weeks recovering her strength.Finally,she left in search of her family.She never found them,but found a new family instead.The Clan.She had a mate,Greytail,but he died.She learned to swim,and now loves water.

RP SAMPLE

The brown she-cat sat down,looking at the kits in the nursery playing.She had a flash back~suddenly she was in a differant time,a differant world.she was sitting down on a tall rock,wattching her brothers splashing in the river.They asked her why she wasn't participating.she stubbornly said,"I hate water,".her brothers just laughed and pushed her in.Her lungs filled with water,and she sank down.
She woke up,coughing and spluttering.She dragged herself out of a shallow pond and onto a thick clump of grass and passed out.

[Fawn]

I think I'm done.It took such a long time since I'm used to a differant format for biographies.

[{Seal}]

Okay, Fawn! Thanks for changing to the form Just a few things

First off, you have "Climbing" under both like and dislike, and you need one more negative trait ^.^

Secondly, please include the fact that she has webbed paws in the description to show me that you've actually read about the "blessings."

Finally, your history needs to be completely changed. If you have read about the Blessings, you know that cats in the Clans have certain special attributes. For WaveClan, the attribute is webbed paws. Since cats have to have these traits to survive in a Clan, no loners would be accepted, because those loners would be normal cats without blessings. (Also, since members here need to use freshkill to buy loners, it would be unfair to let you have the daughter of a loner.)

I am not entirely convinced you have read all of the information in the "Of the Clans" board, so please do that for me before changing anything

[Administrator]

Fawn, you have a few more days to make your correction. Please do so soon!